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The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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Contained in the bar chart is information pertaining to how many British donated their money to charity organizations between 1990 and 2010, broken down by age. From an observational perspective, the percentage of
people
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 aged from 18
years
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 old to 50
years
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 old experienced a downward trend,
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people
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 over 51
years
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 old saw an increase.
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, the age group of 36 to 50
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 old gave the most amount of money to charity in 1990,
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 the opposite was true for 51 to 65
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 old
people
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. Looking at the figures in
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 detail, it is apparent that after beginning at precisely 35%,
people
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 from the age of 51 to 65 grew marginally to nearly 40%
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 of the timeframe. With respect to the oldest generation, it rose slightly between around 32% and 35% over the period of twenty
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 from 1990 to 2010. Turning to the remaining statistics, the proportion of 36-to-50-
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-old
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 giving money to charity started at the top, at roughly 42% in 1990, before decreasing dramatically to exactly 35% in 2010.
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, the ratio of
people
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 aged from 26 to 35
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 old witnessed a substantial drop from over 30% to under 25% throughout the twenty-year period. There was an identical trend for the youngest group of society, where it underwent a rapid decline from approximately 17% to just above 5% between 1990 and 2010.
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