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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the data about the number of total
minutes
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 of phone calls by three different types of calls measured in billions in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the highest figures were for local landline calls over the given period,
while
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 the lowest numbers were for mobile calls.
To begin
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 with, the number of
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 spent on local calls experienced a fluctuation, starting from 70
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minutes
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, in 1995, and increased gradually to reach its peak in 1999 of 90
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minutes
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. After that, the numbers declined throughout the years to reach the bottom around 70
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minutes
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.
On the other hand
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, people in the UK, in 1995, spent less than 40
billion
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minutes
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 on national and international calls, after that the trend experienced a slight increase during the next seven years, ending with 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002.
However
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, the lowest
numbers
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number
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 of
minutes
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were
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spent on mobile calls, in 1995, around 1
billion
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minutes
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, which rose significantly throughout the years until 2002,
which
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when
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has
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had
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 nearly 45
billion
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minutes
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 of telephone calls.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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