The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts illustrate the proportion of 60-64-year-old males and females who were still in the workforce in Belgium
,
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and, USA
USA
. Japan and Australia, compared between two Correct article usage
the USA
years
1970 and 2000.
Overall
, it is apparent that in both years
, female employees were always less than male wherever they were. In addition
, the percentage of employment of men saw a significant increase over the period of thirty years
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In terms of women, the proportion of Belgian and Japanese workers rose slightly, starting at 7% and 40% in 1970, Correct word choice
and ended
ended
at 8% and 43% in 2000 respectively. Meanwhile, the Americans and Australians had downward trends. American employees declined from 38% to 36%, Wrong verb form
ending
similarly
, those who were from Australia began at 16% and dropped to 16% in 2000.
When it comes to men, Japanese males dominated over thirty years
with the growth from 74% to 86%. Three nations including Belgium, the United States and Australia had a similar ending point, around 76%. However
, the biggest change belongs to Belgium, where the initial percentage was only a fifth, while
the two remaining countries went up by about 30%. Lastly
, Japanese males dominated over thirty years
with growth from 74% to 86%.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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