THE GRAPHS BELOW SHOW THE PERCENTAGE OF MEN AND WOMEN AGED 60-64 WERE EMPLOYED IN FOUR COUNTRIES IN 1970 AND 2000
Contained in the two graphs is the information pertaining to the
rate
of male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
aged 60-64 Fix the agreement mistake
females
had
a Correct pronoun usage
who had
job
in different countries in 1970 and 2000. The data is measured in percentage
Overall
, it can be seen that the rate
of women
who have a job
is
nearly the same in 2000 and 1970 in almost Wrong verb form
was
country
. It can Correct determiner usage
every country
also
be observed that the percentage of men who had a job
in2000
outnumbered those in 1970.
Beginning with the Correct your spelling
in 2000
women
rate
in Belgium the data show that there was 8% in 2000 and 7% in 1970. Regarding USA
, there was a large number of Correct article usage
the USA
women
had
a Correct pronoun usage
who had
job
in 2000 and in 1970 which accounted 36
% and 38% respectively. With respect to Japan, there Change preposition
for 36
was
43% and 40% of Correct subject-verb agreement
were
women
who had a job
in 2000 and 1970 respectively. With
Australia, there Change preposition
In
was
only 16% of Correct subject-verb agreement
were
women
who were employed and 18% for
those Change preposition
of
got
the Correct pronoun usage
who got
job
in 2000 and 1970.
Moving onto the data about men’s rate
in age from 60-64 who had the job
. It can be observed that there was only 19% of men who got the job
in 1970. However
, It increased significantly in 2000 and stood at 79%. With respect to USA
, the proportion in 1970 was 55% and in 1970 it was 73%. Regarding Japan, there was 74% of men who were employed in 1970 and 86% in 2000. Correct article usage
the USA
Finally
, in 1970 the rate
in Australia stood at 47% but then
jumped to 76% in 2000.Submitted by [email protected] on
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