The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent
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The given line graph illustrates the percentage of
woman
and men who were employed in four different countries in 1970 and 2000. The data is measured in the percentage
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women
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Belgium
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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