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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant
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the 2 given pie charts illustrate the percentage of diverse types of
energy
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 which were generated in France between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the proportion in production of
gas
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, coal and nuclear
as well as
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 other
energy
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 sources saw an upward trend,
while
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 the opposite was true
in
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for
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 petrol.
Additonally
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Additionally
, coal and
gas
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 were still the main
engergy
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energy
 generations throughout the 10-year period. Looking at the percentage of
gas
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 and coal in
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 detail, it is obvious that
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gas's
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gas
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 production rose slightly from 29,63% in 1995 to 30,31% in 2005. Regarding coal, its generation witnessed a slow increase from 29,80% to 30,93% between 1995 and 2005. Turning towards the remaining sources of
energy
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, where the proportion of
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energy
 production
forom
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from
 other
energy
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 sources and
nucler
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nuclear
 grew approximately 5%, to just over 9% and 10%, respectively.
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, between 1995 and 2005, there was a considerable drop from 29,27% to 19,55% in the generation of petrol.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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