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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.
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The given charts illustrate the data
of
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crime
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 in the United Kingdom during the end of
year
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Overall
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, it can be seen that there was an upward trend between the ages of 12 and 28,
while
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 other ages saw a lower proportion. We can
also
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 observe that violence was the highest of
four
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 main reasons
of
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crime
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. Looking at the figures in
further
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 detail, children from 0 to 8 did not appear in
infraction
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infractions
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, juvenile delinquencies between 12 and 20 dramatically rose to 70% and 80% at the age of 16 and 20 respectively.
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, the percentage was 60% in
24-age
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 and 20% in
28-age
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 before slightly
decreased
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 every next stage. Moving onto the factors that relate to perpetration, most crimes occur from violence which had 46% the largest in all types of
crime
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, there was 23% of property
crime
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,
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, drug
crime
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 saw an approximate equal with 22%. Public order
crime
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 was the lowest rate in the period and equal to about a ninth of violent
crime
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