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he charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six area of the world.

he charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six area of the world.
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #area #world
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The pie charts illustrate the rate of
water
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 consumption for various goals in six regions of the globe.
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, Central Asia has the largest proportion of using
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 for agricultural
purpose
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. South America is one area which
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use
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water
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 for domestic
goal
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goals
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, and Europe has the most range of consuming
water
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 for
industraial
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industrial
use
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. It can be seen that,
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 in Central Asia people
use
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water
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 for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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 with more
that
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 80%, the percentage of
water
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 usage for industrial cases is just 5%.
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, in Europe more than
a
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half of proportion the
water
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 is used for industry.
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,
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Europe
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use
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uses
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 32% of
water
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 in agricultural matter. South America has the highest amount of
water
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 with 19%
for
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consuming
in
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domestic items. consuming
in
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domestic items. Of course,
near
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three-fourth
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three-fourths
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 of
segment
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the segment
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 is dedicated to
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use
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the use
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water
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of water
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 in agriculture. By paying attention to the details, just under half of
value
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the value
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 is used for industrial
purpose
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purposes
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. Africa and South East Asia are two areas which have 84% and 81% of using
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 in agricultural cases
repectively
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respectively
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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