You have been working for a company for some time and other rival companies are willing to employ you with a higher salary for all the practical experience you have gained. Write a letter to your company manager and in your letter: Explain the situation; Say what you would like the manager to do (increase the salary,etc); Say what action you would take in case the manager fails to meet your demands.

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Task Response

Your letter should address all points of the prompt in a clear and concise manner. You need to explain the situation, state what you would like the manager to do, and mention what actions you would take if your demands are not met. Try to improve clarity and detail.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on connecting your ideas more logically. Use linking words and phrases, and ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea. This will help improve the flow and understanding of your letter.

Grammar and Vocabulary

Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure to make your writing more professional and clear. Avoid using informal language like 'wanna.'

Tone

Ensure your opening and closing are professional and courteous. Aim for polite requests rather than demands.

Content

Your message about wanting to stay with the company but needing a higher salary comes across clearly.

Task Response

You have included a clear consequence if your demands are not met, which helps in making your position understood.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

191 words

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