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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the comparison of the proportion of
men
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women
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teachers
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nursery
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pre-school
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pre-
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pre-school
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school
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, primary
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, secondary
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, college, private training
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institute
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 and
university
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educational
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 in the UK in the year 2010 It is clear from the graph that the
women
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teachers
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nursery
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pre-
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school
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, primary
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 and secondary
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educational
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were higher than
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,
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, the opposite trend was true in the rest of
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institute
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university
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universities
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.
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While
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educational
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, the
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men
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teachers
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was
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 equal In
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education
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the education
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sector
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nursery
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pre-
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preschool
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school
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, female
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account
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 for 95%
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while
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 male
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account
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 for only 5%. For
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the education
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education
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the education
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sector
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 primary
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,
women
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teachers
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account
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 for 90%
while
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men
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 only have 10%. In
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education
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the education
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sector
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 secondary
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, the ratio of
women
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teachers
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 is 58%, lower than
nursery
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pre-
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pre-school
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school
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 and primary
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 but still higher than
men
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 at 42%. In
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education
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the education
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sector
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 college , the ratio
female
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of female
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 and male
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was
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were
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 equal at 50%
However
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, in
sector
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 private training
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institute
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institutes
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 and
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university
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universities
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, the ratio of male
teachers
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 is higher than female. In
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education
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the education
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sector
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 private training
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institute
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institutes
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, the percentage of male
teachers
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 is 59%
while
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 female
teachers
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 are 41%. In
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education
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the education
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sector
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university
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, male
teachers
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account
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 for 70% and female
teachers
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account
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 for only 30%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, teachers, nursery, pre-, school, institute, university, education, sector, account with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational setting
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • nursery school
  • higher education
  • proportion
  • outnumber
  • trend
  • comparison
  • historical factors
  • social influence
  • teaching profession
  • data interpretation
  • balance
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