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The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of British youth from 1990 to 2001.
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, it can be seen that all
age
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 brackets witnessed a decrease in
population
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 percentages over the provided period, excluding those aged from 10 to 14
years
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 old with a growth in .
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, even though the eldest group used to make up most of the young
population
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, it was eventually replaced by those just in the first half of their teenage. Regarding the 3
age
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 groups where there was a rise in
population
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 percentages, the youngest group and the oldest were at about 26% and 25% in 1990, respectively. As for the newborn under the
age
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 of 4, its
population
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 rose slightly to a peak of around 26.5% before decreasing slowly
then
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 rapidly to under 24% by the end of the period.
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, the
population
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 in the latter half of their teen experienced a considerable downward trend of approximately 3% after the three first
years
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, to where it started to recover from a low of nearly 23% to
finally
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 reach 25% by 2001. In terms of children aged between 5 to 9
years
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 old, its number climbed gradually to a high of more than 26% in 1997 prior to a mere decline to roughly 25% in the next 4
years
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. Looking at the remaining
age
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 with a rise in
population
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, in 1990
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 than 23% of the children were from 10 to 14
years
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 old, which continuously grew for the whole timeline, surpassing the 5 to 9 group to be the majority of the children by 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, population, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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