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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of academic
staff
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 both genders in seven different facilities in one main university during the year 2012.
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,
it is clear that
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 the faculty of Engineering has the most male
staff
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 members in a university
while
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 its females are
also
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 in the final place compared to others.
Moreover
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, most academic female members are in the faculty of
Education
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.
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male
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 gender, the fraction of Engineering
staff
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 occupied a gigantic 85% followed by both Business and Science with a massive 62%. Law and Medicine represented 60% and 49% respectively;
besides
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,
Education
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 came in
last
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 place with a nominal 25%. What is interesting to note is that male
staff
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 in
Education
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 were less than Medicine by approximately 2 times. On the flip side, most females were in the facilities of
Education
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 and they accounted for an enormous 72% whilst Arts was seen around 58%.
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, Engineering which had the highest in male
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 had the smallest
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 of women, with a minuscule 18%. What is surprising to see is
Education
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 was more than Engineering by exactly 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, education with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • faculty
  • academic staff
  • proportion
  • disparity
  • trends
  • significance
  • broader societal trends
  • gender equality
  • university environment
  • implications
  • predominantly
  • minority
  • skewed
  • equal representation
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