The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graphic gives us information about the
hours
of the day that
tourist
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tourists
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from China, the USA, Turkey and Brazil, spent doing different activities during their
holydays
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holidays
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in Greece in August 2019. The activities were, going to the beach, reading books and visiting
places
.
Overall
, the
tourist
spent more
time
reading books and less
time
visiting
places
.
Chinese
tourist
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tourists
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spent 8
hours
reading books,
following
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followed
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by
Americans
with 5
hours
.
Turkish
and
Brazilians
spend half of the
hours
spent by
Chinese
, a total of 4
hours
.
Brazilians
spent
doble
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double
of
time
at the beach, (6
hours
) than
Chinese
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the Chinese
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, (3
hours
).
Turkish
and
Americans
spent 5 and 4
hours
respectively.
Americans
and
Turkish
tourist
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tourists
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spent 3
hours
visiting
places
, next
tourist
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tourists
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were
Brazilians
with 2
hours
.
Chinese
people were the
tourist
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tourists
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who
spend
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spent
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the least
time
visiting
places
(1 hour), half of the
hours
than
Brazilians
and 3
time
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times
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less than
Turkish
and
Americans
.
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