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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graphic gives us information about the
hours
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 of the day that
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tourist
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tourists
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 from China, the USA, Turkey and Brazil, spent doing different activities during their
holydays
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holidays
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 in Greece in August 2019. The activities were, going to the beach, reading books and visiting
places
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.
Overall
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, the
tourist
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 spent more
time
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 reading books and less
time
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 visiting
places
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.
Chinese
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tourist
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tourists
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 spent 8
hours
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 reading books,
following
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followed
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 by
Americans
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 with 5
hours
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.
Turkish
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 and
Brazilians
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 spend half of the
hours
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 spent by
Chinese
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, a total of 4
hours
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.
Brazilians
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 spent
doble
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double
 of
time
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 at the beach, (6
hours
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) than
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Chinese
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the Chinese
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, (3
hours
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).
Turkish
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 and
Americans
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 spent 5 and 4
hours
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 respectively.
Americans
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 and
Turkish
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tourist
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tourists
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 spent 3
hours
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 visiting
places
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, next
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tourist
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tourists
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 were
Brazilians
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 with 2
hours
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.
Chinese
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 people were the
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tourist
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tourists
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 who
spend
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spent
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 the least
time
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 visiting
places
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 (1 hour), half of the
hours
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 than
Brazilians
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 and 3
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time
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times
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 less than
Turkish
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 and
Americans
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.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, tourist, places, time, chinese, americans, turkish, brazilians with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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