You recently ordered an item of clothing through a store’s website. When you received it, you discovered that it was not the same item you had ordered. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Describe the item you ordered Explain what was wrong with the item you received Say what you would like the manager to do.

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
letter to you, Arround 2
day
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ago I did buy several
item
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of clothing in your store,
it
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and it
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could be say i had experience a bad when
i
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unboxing
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i
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compare
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with
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on
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my
smart phone
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it
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very disparate.
Firstly
,
Im
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I'm
very
dissapounted
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disappointed
to
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you
what
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that what
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i
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buy
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bought
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in your store very different, second first
i
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saw several sablon not
reality
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,
texture
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cloth
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clothes
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not
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comfortable,
in
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my opinion very expensive of the price, to the next
i
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hope you can fix your quality
cloth
.
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,
i
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hope you can
got it
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what
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feel right now, i would like
refund
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a refund
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i dislike
this
cloth
,
moreover
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cloth
not
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good, i feel very hot when
i
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use
this
cloth
in
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my body,
furthemore
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furthermore
the price
very
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expensive
.
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i
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cannot accept
this
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these
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cloth
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clothes
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i
decision
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have decided
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to
return
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. Thank you for your attention Faithfully Zulpi Pathurrahman
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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coherence cohesion
Your letter lacks a clear logical structure. Organize your points more clearly with distinct paragraphs for each main idea.
task achievement
There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrases that obscure your intended meaning. Proofreading and using more standard phraseology will improve clarity.
task achievement
You have successfully made your main points clear: the item was different from what you ordered, the quality was poor, and you would like a refund.
task achievement
Your tone is generally polite and appropriate for a complaint letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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