The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The given diagram illustrates the process of
cement
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making and special technical equipment, and
also
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how
cement
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is used for producing concrete to build houses.
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, it can be seen that
cement
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cement
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-making process consists of five stages smashing, mixing, heating, grinding, and packing.
Initially
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, limestones and clay are put into the crusher where they are smashed into the powder.
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powder goes through the
mixer
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. The next stage of heating occurs in a special oven which circulates 360 degrees during the whole heating process.
After
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this
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stage, a homogenous mass appears which goes to the grinder.
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, produced
cement
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is packed into paper or plastic bags.
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, packed
cement
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is ready for selling or for the production of concrete. As well known, concrete is the essential raw material in construction. That's why concrete production requires special equipment and keeping the rules of producing technology. As we can see from the diagram to produce concrete, need a concrete
mixer
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.
First,
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15 per cent of
cement
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and 25 per cent of sand are put
it
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into the
mixer
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, and
then
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what is added.
Further
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mixer
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starts to roll. Later, small stones, which are called gravel, are added to the mixture in the
mixer
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. After a
while
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, produced concrete can be used for building purposes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, mixer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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