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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figures demonstrate the steps and tools which are used in
the
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cement
 production, and how particularly
cement
 is used for producing concrete for building aims.
Overall
, there are several different stages in
cement
 and concrete production.
Firstly
, limestone and clay are crushed into the powder,
then
 it is mixed and heated in
rotating
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a rotating
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 heater. After that heated powder is
gradered
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graded
 into the
cement
 which
are
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is
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 placed in the bags. The stages of concrete production
consists
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consist
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 of
the
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two plain steps. Concrete is formed by four main ingredients, gravel, sand
cement
 and water
consisted
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 of 50, 25, 15 and 10 percent respectively. All of them are mixed in
concrete
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a concrete
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 mixer and concrete is formed
at the end
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
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