The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruitd and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruitd and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Presented for consideration is a bar chart relating to the proportion of consumers of five daily different portions of fruits and vegetables in
United
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Kingdom between 2001 and 2008. The figures are measured in percentage. Generally speaking, it is evident that in the first three years of the timeline, men and children
remain
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stable
while
women witnessed an upward trend.
Additionally
, women were always the leading proportion in the whole chart. Commencing with men and youngsters, it can be observed that from 2001 to 2003 both remained unchanged with slightly more than 15% and more than a tenth respectively.
Furthermore
, in the next four
years
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the proportion of mature males went up gradually and reached
the
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peak at
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30% and the same went for children when the figure rose to around 29% in 2007 and bounced back to nearly a quarter in the
last
year. Moving onto the remaining statistic, it is noticeable that women launched with the highest number at about a fifth in 2001 and
this
figure surged to reach its peak at more than 35% in 2006. In the
last
two years, it saw a slight decline at more than a third and remained constant.
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