The diagrams below show the life cycle o f a species o f large fish called the salmon. Summarise the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make com parisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the life cycle o f a species o f large fish called the

salmon.

Summarise the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make com parisons where relevant
Salmon
begin life as eggs on a pebbly riverbed, hidden among reeds in the slow-moving upper reaches of a river. After five to six months the eggs hatch into ‘fry’.For approximately the next four years, these baby
salmon
will live in the lower,faster-flowing waters of their river. During
this
time they measure between
threeand
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three and
eight centimetres in length. By the time
salmon
reach twelve to fifteen centimetres, they are termed ‘smolt1, and at
this
time they migrate
further
downriver into the open sea. After five years at
sea
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the
salmon
will have grown to adult size, which is between seventy and seventy-six centimetres. They
then
begin swimming back to their birthplace, where they will lay their eggs
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and the cycle starts anew. In summary, the
salmon
passes through three distinct physical stages as it grows to maturity. Each of these stages takes place in a very different aquatic location. It is noteworthy that the first two stages of
this
fish's life occur in a freshwater environment,
while
the third stage is lived in saltwater.
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