The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
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The graph provides information about some demographic statistics between 1940 and 2020 in Scotland. It is clearly observed from the graph that the proportion of birth
rate
was the highest by far at the beginning of the period.
Moreover
, the figure for all categories decreased gradually over the entire period.
To begin
with, the percentage of birth
rate
was at nearly 2.5% in 1940 which was the highest.
Although
, it decreased to approximately 1.9% in 1945,
However
, in the subsequent 5 years it rose to almost 2.2%.
Nonetheless
, it began to fall significantly during the period and
finally
stood at 0.5% in 2020. Turning towards other trends, in 1940, the death
rate
was 1.5% which was the second highest. Between 1940 and 1960, there was a substantial decrease of almost 1% in the death
rate
. After which, it stayed roughly the same over the next two decades at nearly 0.4%. In the subsequent three decades, the death
rate
saw a slight decline to 0.3% followed by a rapid rise to well over 0.5% from 2010 to 2020. In 1940, the figure for population growth was at 0.7% and it dropped to 0.5% in 1945.
However
, it saw an increase to 1.5% until 1955 followed by a gradual fall to 0.0% in the early 21st century.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth rate
  • percentage
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • stabilize
  • demographic
  • interrelate
  • historical events
  • social policies
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare advancements
  • variable
  • measured
  • decade
  • significant
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