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The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different veriables are measured in percentages
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The
line
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 graph provides key information about three
rate
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 sectors in Scotland. The variables are on interval
percent
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per cent
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 scales.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the double
line
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 ( population growth
rate
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) has decreased from 1955, approximately.
In addition
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, the double
line
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 and the solid
line
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 are gradually decreasing from 1955 to 1990. In certain, the dotted
line
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 increased from 2010.
According to
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 what is shown, solid
line
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 (birth
rate
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) was the highest
rate
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 in 1940 at mostly 2,5
percentage
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.
However
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, the double
line
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 (population growth
rate
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) was the lowest
rate
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 in 1940 at nearly 0,5
percent
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. In terms of the dotted
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 (death
rate
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), from 2000 to 2020 significant change
and
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apply
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that
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because the
rate
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 was increased from 0,5 to 1,0
percent
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per cent
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.
also
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, the dotted
line
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 intercept the solid
line
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 in 2019.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth rate
  • percentage
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • stabilize
  • demographic
  • interrelate
  • historical events
  • social policies
  • economic conditions
  • healthcare advancements
  • variable
  • measured
  • decade
  • significant
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