The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates how many
women
work
in five various
countries
whether they are employees or
the
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managers. It can be clearly seen that
,
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Japan has the highest
amount
of
women
Labour
Force
.
However
,the
countries
like Australia and the US
has
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the highest rate of management by
women
. The average of
women
who are employees is %48 in Japan.(Which is the highest
amount
of Labour
Force
between all
countries
).
Moreover
,42 per
cent
of
women
work
at companies in
the
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both
countries
of Australia and Sri Lanka.
Although
,the proportion of
women
managers in Sri Lanka is %9.(Which is the lowest percentage of employers among the whole
countries
).
In addition
,the
amount
of
population
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who
work
as
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workforce
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the workforce
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in the
united
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of
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states is 46 per
cent
,Compared to
women
who are managers at
43per
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43 per
cent
in America,which is the same as the percentage of
women
management
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in Australia.
On the other hand
,in
Egypt
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Egypt,
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the
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companies do not tend to employ
women
to
work
and the proportion of
work
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workforce
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force
is 20 per
cent
.(Which is the lowest
amount
of Labour
Force
between other
countries
).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, work, countries, amount, force, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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