The chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 to 2010.
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The bar chart describes information about the proportion of overweight men and women in Australia, over the course of 30
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, beginning in 1980. Looking from an
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perspective,
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the percentage of overweight males was higher than the percentage of overweight females.
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, the fractions of men and women who carried extra weight experienced an upward trend over the period. The percentage of overweight males in Australia grew sharply from 40% to 48% in 1980 and 1990, respectively. After that, it continued to soar to 65% in 2000, before undergoing a decrease to 60% in the
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. The rates of overweight females in Australia rose considerably from 31% to 44% over the period of
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figure increased to approximately 53%
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in the next ten
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and it remained steady
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of the period
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