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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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Demonstrated in the provided graph is the proportion of three groups of
residentsin
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residents in
 the United Kingdom namely men, women and children who
follow
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 a daily diet of five parts of fruits and vegetables between the
year
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years
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 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, what
stand
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 out from the chart is that both men and
chidren
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children
 figures remained stable until 2003.
In addition
,
in
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it
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 can be seen apparently that women ranked at first over the period of eight years.
To begin
, regarding
male
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the male
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 group, its percentage which
standed
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stood
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 at about 17% in the first three years of the duration saw a gradual increase to roughly 28% in 2006 and it
then
 stabilized again during the remaining time.
Likewise
,
children
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 data had
a
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the
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 same trend from 2001 to 2003, hovering around 12%, after that, it went up slowly in the next four years and gained approximately 27%, before slightly
declined
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 by nearly 2% in the
last
 year. In terms of females, it dominated the proportion of those who ate fruits and vegetables five times each day over the eight-year period with a significant rise from a-fifth in 2001 to just over
a-third
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 in 2006.
However
, it went down marginally again by 30% in 2008.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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