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The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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Contained in the diagram is data pertaining to how
water
 that we drink every day is made from clean energy.
Overall
 it is a complex process, commencing with sunlight affecting the underground to culminating with
Water
 contained in the container and ready to use. The procedure commences with the sunlight from the sun reference down to
solar
Correct article usage
the solar
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 panel that will create a power ther go through the converter. After that, there will be electricity coming from the converter and going to the pump put into the underground. The following steps involve there will be
water
come
Wrong verb form
coming
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 from the pump and going into the
water
 tank. Preparing
water
 for people to drink is the focus of the latter steps in the sequence. The
water
 into the
water
 tank now
go
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goes
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 into another tank. After that step, the
water
 can be drunk. There will be a tap for people to drink
water
. The remaining
water
 will contained In the container.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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