IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
#minutes #population #india #china #year #projections #growth #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the number of people who lived in
India
 and
China
 between 2000 to 2050 . The data are measured in billions.
Overall
, Both
countries
Change noun form
country's
countries'
show examples
 population numbers
are increase
Change the verb form
are increased
are increasing
show examples
 during the period.
Althoug
Correct your spelling
Although
India
initialy
Correct your spelling
initially
lower
Wrong verb form
lowered
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
its
show examples
 project to outrace
china
Capitalize word
China
show examples
 in the future. On one hand, in 2000 the number of
China
Change noun form
China's
show examples
 population was over 1.2
billion
 which makes it higher than
India
 by around 2
billion
.
Then
 it rose
steady
Change the adjective
steadily
show examples
 to around 1.43
billion
 in 2022. They expect that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
the figure will decline in
Correct article usage
the futuar
show examples
futuar
Correct your spelling
future
 to around 1.4
billion
 in 2040.
On the other hand
,
India
experianced
Correct your spelling
experienced
 a rapid decrease throughout the period. It
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
started at 1
billon
Correct your spelling
billion
show examples
 in 2000 and
dramaticly
Correct your spelling
dramatically
 rose to around 1.3
billion
 in recent
day
Fix the agreement mistake
days
show examples
.
In addition
 , they predict the line will
countinue
Correct your spelling
continue
go
Fix the infinitive
to go
show examples
 up , exceeding
china
Capitalize word
China
show examples
 in 2030 at approximatily1.4 and
reach
Wrong verb form
reaching
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 peak
with
Change preposition
of
show examples
 1.6
billion
 in 2030.
Submitted by ananan2780 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, billion with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: