The chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various free time activities in England.

The chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various free time activities in England.
The chart illustrates how
men
and
women
spend their free
time
on various activities in England.
Overall
, more
women
than
men
spend
time
with family and when shopping in their free
time
,
while
the opposite was true for other activities.
Additionally
, there was a dramatic difference between the proportions of
men
and
women
who went shopping and used the Internet. In
further
detail, watching TV was the most popular activity among
both
genders, which
was
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accounted for more than three-quarters. Spending
time
with family, despite having an opposite pattern,
also
had the majority of
men
and
women
do
this
in their free
time
, recorded at around 76% for
both
sexes. The solitary activities
such
as doing sport/ exercise and reading,
however
, had more
men
than
women
involved, at about 72% for
women
and nearly 75% for
men
. Moving on to other categories where the disparities were much more considerable, the percentage of
women
who went shopping was nearly three times higher than that of
men
, making it the biggest gap between
both
genders.
Conversely
, the figure for
men
using the Internet outnumbered that for
women
, at around 73% and 40% respectively. Playing computer games,
however
, was least
favored
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by
both
men
and
women
, at under one-fifth.

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