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The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature , and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature , and make comparison where relevant.
#water #power #summarise #information #feature #comparison
Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to different methods of
create
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creating
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 clean
water
 by
sunlight
 .
Overall
 , it is complex commencing with
sunlight
 moving through mechanical can
sientific
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scientific
 stages to make drink
water
 for consumption . Beginning the first stage , solar
panel
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panels
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 absorb
sunlight
 from
sun
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the sun
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 and bring all solar energy to
converter
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the converter
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 . Next , when
converter
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the converter
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have
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has
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 enough energy , it
exchange
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exchanges
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 all to electricity and
transport
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transports
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electricity
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the electricity
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 to
pump
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the pump
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 which is put down in underground wet .
Then
 ,
pump
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the pump
a pump
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 is opened to suck
water
 inside the ground . Turn to
next
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the next
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 stage ,
water
 tank is put down on the wooden platform . It
take
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 all
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the unclen
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unclen
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unclean
water
 from
pump
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the pump
a pump
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 and
exchange
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exchanges
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them
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it
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 become clean
water
by
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through
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sunlight
 .
Finally
 ,
tap
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the tap
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 is opened to bring clean
water
 from
water
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the water
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 tank into
moveable
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the moveable
a moveable
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 container . All
drink
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drinking
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water
 will sell
for
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to
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 consumers .
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sunlight with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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