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The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature , and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature , and make comparison where relevant.
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Contained in the given graphic is information relating to how machines use solar power to make drinking
water
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. There are 4 steps, commencing with the solar panel absorbing the sunlight, and ending with the
water
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 moving out through the pipe into the container.
To begin
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 with, the solar panel absorb the solar energy. It is converted into electricity to run the pumping machine which is located in the underground well.
Then
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 , the pump is opened to suck
water
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 inside the ground . The ensuing phase is when the
water
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 is hauled up to the ground in a verticle pipe.
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 to the next stage , the
water
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 tank is put down on the wooden platform . It takes all unclean
water
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 from the pump and exchanges it become clean
water
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 through sunlight .
Finally
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 , the tap is opened to bring clean
water
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 from the
water
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 tank into the moveable container . All drinking
water
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 will be sold to consumers .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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