The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
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three types of service made by UK dwellers broken down by
age
groups during 2004. From an observational perspective, it is evident
how
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as people got older, there was an upward trend in
food
and
drink
spending.
In addition
to
this
,
food
and
drink
took over a majority
in
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the surveyed expenditure, with the exception of those under 30 in which restaurant and hotel
was
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where payment
predominantly
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put
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. With regards to the 60 and below where great discrepancy did not occur, restaurant and hotel completely dominated
food
and
drink
along with
entertainment when it comes to how much the residents spent on each, with nearly 2.5 times greater prevalence observed.
However
, as the
age
group grew higher,
this
figure became slowly surpassed
by
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food
and
drink’s
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spending by those whose
age
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ages
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between 31 and 45 (by about 2%), and with entertainment expenditure exceeding it as people turned 46 to 60, at above 16% and around 14%, respectively. Considering the 61-75
age
group, in which the largest disparity between the conducted categories was experienced, restaurant and hotel
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of these people stood at a minor of approximately 2%,
while
food
and
drink’s
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reached exactly
at
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20%, and
a
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slight
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greater by about 3% made by
entertainment’s
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. In terms of the over 76,
whereas
the differences between each assessed spending got shortened (below 10% greater by distinct following as the figure got extended),
food
and
drink
had its expense reach its peak for the entire year.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, food, drink with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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