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Nowadays, people make new friends using social media and internet chat groups. Some of them believes that is good. Other people thinks that face-to-face conversation is beneficial. Discuss both sides

#people #friends #media #internet #chat #groups #conversation
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Currently, social media and
internet
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the internet
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is
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are
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 made
placed
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apply
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for making friends by chat
group
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groups
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. some
people
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argued
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that is
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 acceptable, Meanwhile, other
people
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 have
opinion
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the opinion
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 that face-to-face conversation is very
essentials
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essential
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both
of
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view
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views
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. On the one hand, Technology is advanced
that
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and
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people
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 can access social media and
internet
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the internet
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 to meet different
people
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 from different countries,
for example
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 by using Facebook and Instagram they can have many
frinends
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friends
 on the platform.
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, The
people
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 can know each other.
then
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 they can widely friendship.
In addition
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, Culture is essential nowadays, so using social media and
internet
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the internet
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 can increase
the
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knowladge
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knowledge
,
for instance
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have
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make
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 new friends from
other country
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another country
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,
such
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 as India
and
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Australia and
United
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the United
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Kindom
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Kingdom
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.
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,
the
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people
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culture
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cultures
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 without they will go to the country.
On the other hand
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,
Real
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a Real
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 friend is the best way to
get
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make
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 new
friend
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friends
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, Because they can meet each other
by
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face-to-face. so most
people
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 have
feeling
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 good if they meet other
people
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 in real life because they can see the body
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language
a
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of a
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person and
caracther
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character
 them is outstanding or terrible, for
exampe
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example
 meeting and drinking coffee at
cafe
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a cafe
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that
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it
get
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 vibes to
dicuss
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discuss
 regarding a person and most
people
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 to meet the reality not online or
aplication
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application
.
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, they
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closed
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friend
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friends
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 if they meet in
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real life.
To sum up
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, some
people
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prefered
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prefer
 to meet online
bacause
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because
 they can meet
people
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 from different
place
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places
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 and different country to know each other
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that
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which
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 is increasing
knowladge
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knowledge
 and culture.
However
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, other
people
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 like to meet in real life because it would
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feel
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 well to be
closed
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close
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friends
frends
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friends
 to meet face-to-face
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relevant specific examples
Ensure that all examples used are relevant and support the main arguments clearly. Your example about meeting and drinking coffee could have been more developed to show how face-to-face interactions build deeper connections.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on your sentence structures and try to reduce the number of grammatical errors. This would improve the clarity and allow your ideas to come across more effectively.
clear comprehensive ideas
Consider widening your vocabulary to better express your ideas and opinions. This would improve your overall writing quality.
logical structure
Be careful with the agreement and tenses. Ensuring that your verbs match their subjects correctly would add to the coherence of your writing.
introduction conclusion present
You have clearly structured your essay with an introduction, main body, and conclusion.
complete response
You have made an attempt to discuss both perspectives on the topic, which shows a good understanding of the task.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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