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The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram demonstrates the procedure for manufacturing olive
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 in a factory.
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, it can be seen that there are seven distinct steps in olive
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 production, starting from harvesting the unripe olive fruit and ending with the sale of the final product.
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, mature olives are gathered by workers from the olive trees and cleansed with cold water to remove all the dirt.
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using a conveyor belt, the washed olives are placed into a specialized container, where the crushing process occurs.
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 step, the olives are separated into olive paste and seeds. These stones are no longer required and are discarded. In the fourth stage, the olive paste is packed into perforated bags and pressed under pressure.
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, it is moved to a separating machine that divides it into water and pure
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.
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, the
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 is stored in bottles for easy handling and packaged in boxes before being distributed to various markets for sale.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harvesting - the process of collecting ripe fruits, such as olives, from trees.
  • Rinsing - washing thoroughly with water to clean away debris or impurities.
  • Crushing - smashing or grinding something into small pieces or a paste.
  • Paste - a thick, soft mixture formed by crushing olives.
  • Pressing - the act of applying force to extract liquid.
  • Centrifuge - a machine that separates substances of different densities by spinning them rapidly.
  • Filtering - the process of removing impurities or unwanted particles from a liquid.
  • Bottling - packaging liquid in bottles for storage or sale.
  • Impurities - unwanted or foreign substances within a mixture.
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