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​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie diagrams illustrate the proportion of four different kinds of
food
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 consumed in three categories comprising the
world
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,
China
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 and
India
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 in the year 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 people all around the
world
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 including
India
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 choose to eat processed
food
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 and they are not fascinated by nuts and seeds.
However
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, Chinese individuals
also
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 enjoy consuming processed
food
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 but animal
food
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 is not intriguing to them.
To begin
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 with, the fraction of the
world
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 population choosing processed
food
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 was a gigantic 41% more than
India
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 and
China
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 by a minuscule 2% and a nominal 7% respectively.
Furthermore
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, Chinese people consumed vegetables and fruits more than those two, representing 32%. What is interesting to note is that the ratio of veggies in
India
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 is less than the
world
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 processed
food
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 by approximately 2 times.
Additionally
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, the percentage of animal
food
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 in
India
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 was the highest, occupying an enormous 27%, followed by the
world
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, with 26%. A tiny 15% was seen in
this
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 type of
food
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 in
China
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.
Moreover
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, the
world
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 came in
last
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 place when it comes to nuts and seeds. What is surprising to see is that the difference percentage of nuts between the
world
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(4%) and
China
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(19%) was roughly 5 times.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, world, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average consumption
  • Global composition
  • Food category
  • Meat, vegetables, fruits, grains
  • Percentage, proportion
  • Comparative analysis
  • Similarities and differences
  • Intake, consumption patterns
  • Striking differences
  • Notable similarities
  • Higher/lower consumption
  • Significant difference
  • Proportionate share
  • Relevant comparison
  • General trend
  • Insight
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