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The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram highlights the gender distribution of researchers signed up
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 computer sciences subjects at a US university in the year 2011.
Overall
, the three most popular subjects among both groups are psychology,
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natural
 sciences and math. Natural science is the only subject that
recieved
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received
 equal
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interest
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 both genders, followed by psychology with just
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diffrence
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While
 Mathematics witnessed the largest gender gap, with less than 50
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 compared to 200
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 assigned.
On the other hand
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linguistics
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 the
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surplused
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surplus
 by nearly 30. It is
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noticeable
 that females generally did not prefer math-based subjects, which is evident by less contribution of
this
 population in engineering, programming and mathematics than males,
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