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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the
budgets
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 for
food
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 spent by ordinary families on restaurant
meals
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, in percentages,
while
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 the graph demonstrates the number of
meals
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 consumed in both fast
food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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, both in different years.
Overall
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, the percentage of the
food
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 budget spent on restaurant
meals
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 rose substantially by the year 2000.
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, a significant surge in the number of
meals
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 eaten at fast
food
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restaurants
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 started in 1980 and continued.
To begin
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, the pie charts reveal the gradual increase in the
budgets
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 spent on external
meals
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,
as well as
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 the noticeable declines in home cooking
budgets
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, from 1970 to 2000 with 10-year intervals. A five per cent increase only in
budgets
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 for external
meals
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 occurred between 1970 and 1980. The percentage of
budgets
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 spent on
restaurants
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 doubled and more in the next ten years, from 15% in 1980
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 to 35% in 1980.
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, the percentage of the budget spent on home cooking was equal to the latter in 2000, as both were 50%.
In addition
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, the number of
meals
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 eaten yearly at sit-down
restaurants
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 increased steadily and gradually over the 30-year period, from 20
meals
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 to approximately 50. Fast
food
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,
on the other hand
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, flourished as a dramatic surge started in 1980 and followed for the next few decades. Ultimately, around 90 fast
food
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meals
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 were consumed yearly by 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budgets, food, meals, restaurants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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