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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the total of male and female individuals who
further
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 their studies in both full-time and part-time
education
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 in three years with ten-
year
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 intervals from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 people tend to apply for part-time
education
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 which is mostly by males in the first
year
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 of record and females in the
last
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year
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 .
However
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, the trend of full-time
education
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 in both genders is the same, increasing throughout the
year
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.
To begin
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 with, the number of men applying for full-time learning started at an enormous 1,000,000 and noticeably dropped to 850,000 in 1980/81 before gently escalating to 900,000 in 1990/91.
Furthermore
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, women began roughly at 750,000 and increased to exactly 800,000 in the next ten years. A skyrocket in women was seen in 1990/91 and arrived at its peak with a gigantic 1,100,000. What is interesting to note is that the gap between the highest peaks of both male and female learners was around 100,000.
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, the volume of full-time
education
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 of males was nearly a minuscule 100,000 and continuously inclined;
as well as
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, ending at a nominal 250,000.
Besides
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, females occupied a meagre 50,000 in the first
year
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 and shot up to the same number as
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men in 1990/91. What is surprising to see is that the difference between
two
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 genders in the first
year
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 was approximately 50,000.

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