the graph below shows in percentage terms the changing attern of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The graph provides about changing patterns of domestic
access
to modern technology incomes in the United Kingdom.
Patterns like Use synonyms
CD
player, Home computer and Internet Add an article
a CD
access
increased steadily, Use synonyms
meanwhile
there was a slight fluctuation in the changing of Mobile telephone.
There were Add a comma
meanwhile,
rises
in CD Fix the agreement mistake
rise
player’s
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players’
access
to modern technology from about 60 Use synonyms
percent
to about 80 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Likewise
, there was a gradual rise for Home computers from 1996/1997 to 2002/2003 by about 25 Linking Words
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Furthermore
, for Internet Linking Words
Use synonyms
access
the trend was slightly upward from 1998/1999 to 2002/2003.
It is noticeable that the domestic Add a comma
access,
access
to modern technology in homes in the UK for CD players was always higher than the other three patterns.Use synonyms
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