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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the line graph is information pertaining to a survey's outcome relating to the causes that led many city dwellers to migrate to a specific nation's capital city. Looking at the illustration in
further
 detail, employment stood at just above 60000
people
 in 2000 and rose considerably to approximately 85000
people
 in 2005. During the same period, the reason for study started at only 25000 before jumping to almost 50000
people
. In the following 5 years, both career and schooling saw a steady rise by 6000
people
 and 5000
people
 respectively.
However
, employment saw a slight decline from more than 90000
people
 to an estimated 89000
people
whereas
 study increased significantly and reached its peak at the same point as education. Regarding the remaining categories, family and friends went up slowly from 12000 to 13000 in the first 5 years and climbed to 21000 in 2010. Throughout the rest of the time period, it remained stable.
Similarly
, there was a continuous rise in the number of adventurers from 11000 to just below 15000. From an observational perspective, all purposes experience an upward trend with occupation and education are the most common answers
while
 family and friends and adventure are less frequent.
Additionally
, employment remained highest throughout the timeframe.
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