The chart anf graph below give information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups.

The chart anf graph below give information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups.
The given bar chart and line graph present three various groups of employees in Australia and the number of unemployed
which
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apply
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from those groups between 1993 and 2003. Both
contribution
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contributions
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are provided in percentage. In general,
it is clear that
almost
workers
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all workers
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working in Australia were Australian.
Additionally
, the jobless rate for all three categories decreased during a period of 10 years.
To begin
, the figures
of
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for
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workforce
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the workforce
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from
English- speaking
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English-speaking
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countries and
non- English
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non-English
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speaking countries were similar with 14% and 10% in that order.
However
, the contribution of
Australiam
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Australian
employees
out numbered
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outnumbered
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the others, at about three quarters. Turning to the remaining data, it is apparent that stages of unemployment were always highest in the NESC group,
while
the opposite was true for workers from ESC. The percentage of
NESC
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the NESC
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group had a slight decrease between 1993 and 1997. After that, the line had a fluctuation, it fell from around 7% to 3%.
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Similiar
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to
NESC
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the NESC
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group, the
Australia
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Australian
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workers declined gradually to 1995 and fluctuated
during
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2 years, in the
ends
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, the share fell
down
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slightly to 2003 with
regarding
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to
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the graph, the number of ESC groups had
oscillate
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change from 1993 to 2003, go down to 2.4% and rise around 2.45%, the line reached the lowest point in 2003
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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