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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph provides information about the link between age and
crime
.
Additionally
, the pie chart illustrates the proportion of several kinds of
crime
 in the United Kingdom
last
 year.
Overall
, it is evident that most
of
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young people who were from 12 to 28 years old
commited
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committed
crime
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crimes
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.
In addition
, most of the criminals
related
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are related
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 to violence. Breaking the line graph into details, it can be seen that the highest data was witnessed in 20-year-old criminals, at precisely 80%.
Moreover
, the ratio of
felony
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felonies
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 of people who were between 28 and 60
were
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 all lower than 20%.
Furthermore
, nearly half of the unlawful actions were
due to
 violence. On the one hand, the figures for drug
crime
 and property
crime
 were almost the same, around 23%.
On the other hand
, the rest of the pie chart was public order
crime
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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