Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the country side. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Companies and Factories located in the major cities have problems
such
as
congested
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congestion
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and
increassed
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increased
demand
in
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housing. In my
opinion
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I firmly believe that
indiustries
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industries
do bring certain issues
such
as pollution and accidents, which
leads
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lead
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to increased motor vehicle deaths. First and foremost, the main
issuue
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issue
of talk is about
the
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pollution and how it started affecting the living population.
This
is because of the amount of industries
that
is
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located next to schools and residential
area
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areas
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.
For instance
, people residing in India, have been complaining regarding the health issues caused by excessive
smokes
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and chemical waste from the industrial units.
As a result
,
majority
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the majority
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of the residents had problems with
comuting
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commuting
computing
to their jobs and eventually getting laid off from
the
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companies.
Futhuremore
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Furthermore
, traffic and accidents have
also
risen
through out
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throughout
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the years,
that
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and
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it has become impossible for the residents to make it to their jobs/campuses.
Due to
the massive
crowd
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it has caused difficulties for health care professionals to attend an emergency or even save lives. People instantly get upset over the fact that
,
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they should drive for hours through traffic just to
reavh
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reach
their
schhol
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school
/
work place
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workplace
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.
For example
, parents are worried
to send
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their children off to school because of increased accidents near the main areas of the city. In conclusion, I agree that factories should be
re-allocated
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to the
country side
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countryside
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for the
saftey
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safety
of the community and the happiness of the residents who reside in those cities. It would develop a better work and family environment for the population.
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Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and free from spelling errors. You have some typos and grammar mistakes that affect the clarity of your essay. For example, 'congested and increassed demand in housing' should be 'congestion and increased demand for housing.'
content development
Avoid repetition. You mentioned pollution and accidents multiple times. Try to provide different aspects of each problem to give a more comprehensive overview.
structure clarity
Strengthen your introduction and conclusion. Your introduction is a bit weak and does not clearly state your position until later in the essay. Your conclusion also lacks a powerful closing statement.
content
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Your essay addresses the topic effectively and provides a clear opinion.
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You have a logical flow of ideas with a clear beginning, middle, and end.

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