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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
chart
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 above demonstrates the 4
seperated
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separated
separate
 countries female jobless
percantage
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percentage
.  When
looked
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looking
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 at the
chart
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 in more detail during 2013 most top
percantange
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percentage
 was England with 6.8
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percentage
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 the lowest which is 5.4
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percentage
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 with Wales. In 2014 Scotland
getting
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 leadership on
this
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chart
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 with 6.7
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percentage
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 the bottom
percentage
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 is Northern
Ireland
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 with 4.6
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percentage
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per cent
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. Looking at the total for each country
England
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percentage
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 getting
decrease
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with
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 0.3% in a year. for Wales
this
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reduce
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reduces
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to
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with
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 0.4%
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 for Northern
Ireland
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 %1, for Scotland
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however
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however,
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 the graph
gets
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increase
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increases
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by
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with
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 0.7%. Northern
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Ireland
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Ireland's
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percentage
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 get lowed 1% in a year and
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this
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at this
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 point
Ireland
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 has become
slightest
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the slightest
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 for jobless females in the
chart
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. 3
country
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countries
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are reduce
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are reducing
are reduced
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percentage
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the percentage
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 in a year.Except
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in Scotland
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Scotland
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Scotland,
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 the jobless female issue has become more significant. In
the
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apply
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2014 2
country
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country's
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percentage
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around
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was around
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 6%.
However
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 for Wales around 5%
moreover
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 Northern
Ireland
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 around 4%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, percentage, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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