The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The
chart
above demonstrates the 4
seperated
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separated
separate
countries female jobless
percantage
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percentage
.  When
looked
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looking
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at the
chart
in more detail during 2013 most top
percantange
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percentage
was England with 6.8
percentage
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the lowest which is 5.4
percentage
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per cent
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with Wales. In 2014 Scotland
getting
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got
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leadership on
this
chart
with 6.7
percentage
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per cent
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the bottom
percentage
is Northern
Ireland
with 4.6
percentage
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per cent
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. Looking at the total for each country
England
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percentage
getting
decrease
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with
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0.3% in a year. for Wales
this
reduce
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to
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with
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to
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0.4%
moreover
for Northern
Ireland
%1, for Scotland
however
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however,
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the graph
gets
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apply
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increase
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increases
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by
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with
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0.7%. Northern
Ireland
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Ireland's
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percentage
get lowed 1% in a year and
this
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at this
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point
Ireland
has become
slightest
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the slightest
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for jobless females in the
chart
. 3
country
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countries
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are reduce
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are reducing
are reduced
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percentage
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the percentage
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in a year.Except
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in Scotland
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Scotland
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Scotland,
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the jobless female issue has become more significant. In
the
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apply
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2014 2
country
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country's
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percentage
around
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was around
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6%.
However
for Wales around 5%
moreover
Northern
Ireland
around 4%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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