The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
Pie charts demonstrate the output data of
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the survey
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that was given to
parkway
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hotel
visitors to provide feedback
of
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on
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how they rated
hotel
residents
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residents'
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service
. The survey was done
tow
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two
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times in
to
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two
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different years 2005 and 2010 and targeted 100 visitors during both years.
Overall
,
majority
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the majority
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of
people
voted that the
customer
service
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satisfactory in the year 2005,
while
, in 2010 good
customer
service
dominate
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dominated
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the pie chart. Meanwhile, a small
per cent
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percentage
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of
residents
focused that
service
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was
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excellent in 2005, pie chart of 2010 illustrates that almost the same
per cent
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percentage
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said that the
service
was very poor. On the one hand, in 2005, 45% of the survey candidates showed satisfaction towards
hotel
customer
service
. In context,
people
who said that the
hotel
service
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was
good are almost equal to
people
who voted that the
service
was very poor as both
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about 15% of the total visitors. Despite
of
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, the 5%
residents
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of residents
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who answered that the
service
was excellent, 21%
residents
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of residents
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consider it poor
service
.
On the other hand
, in 2010, 39 %
customers
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of customers
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consider
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considered
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customer
help as good,
although
the sum of
people
who were satisfied and who agreed that the help was poor is equal to the
people
who said that
service
was superior. And only 4% of
people
believe that
service
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inferior.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel, residents, service, people, customer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • customer service
  • questionnaire
  • survey
  • respondents
  • rating scale
  • hospitality
  • customer satisfaction
  • comparison
  • data
  • trends
  • improvement
  • deterioration
  • feedback
  • service areas
  • hospitality industry
  • guest experience
  • satisfaction level
  • to rate
  • significant
  • frequency
  • percentage
  • chart
  • bar graph
  • pie chart
  • analysis
  • conclusion
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