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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs illustrate the details of
crime
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 types in the UK
as well as
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 the connection between and the
crime
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 rate from
last
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 year.
Overall
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, among 4 different
crime
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 types, violent
crime
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 placed first and the
crime
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 rate peaked in the late 10s to early 20s.
Last
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 year in the UK, the pie chart indicates that violent
crime
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 accounts for 46% of all
crime
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. It's followed by property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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 which accounted for 23% and 22% respectively. The other
crime
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, which is a public order
crime
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, makes up the remaining percentage.
On the other hand
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, data on the connection between
age
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 and
crime
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 showed that less than 10
thousand
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crime
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cases
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 were done by people within the youth of 12 years old. The
crime
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cases
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then
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 peaked for people of
age
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 20 with around 80
thousand
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crime
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cases
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. It's followed by
age
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 16 with 70
thousand
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crime
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cases
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 and people
of
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apply
show examples
age
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 24 with 60
thousand
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crime
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cases
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. The
crime
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 rate gradually decreases as the
age
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 group is older.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, thousand, cases with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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