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The line graph provides information about the amount of books that were borrowed in four differen months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph provides information about the amount of books that were borrowed in four differen months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed from four
libraries
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 located in the villages of
West
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Eaton
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,
Ryeslip
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, Sutton Wood, and
Church
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 Mount from
June
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 to September 2014.
Overall
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, three
libraries
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West
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Eaton
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, Sutton Wood, and
Church
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 Mount experienced an increase in the
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed,
while
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Ryeslip
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 saw a decline. In detail, Sutton Wood had around 250
books
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 borrowed in
June
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.
This
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number
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 slightly increased to just over 250 in July,
then
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 dropped sharply to 100 in August.
However
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, by the end of the period, the
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed surged to approximately 300, making it the highest among the four
libraries
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.
Similarly
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, both
West
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Eaton
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 and
Church
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 Mount started with around 50
books
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 borrowed in
June
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. By September, the
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed had tripled for both
libraries
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, reaching around 150 each.
Conversely
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,
Ryeslip
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 experienced a significant decrease. The
number
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 of
books
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 borrowed dropped dramatically from over 300 in
June
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 to about 150 in September. Despite
this
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 decline,
Ryeslip
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's figures remained higher than those of
West
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Eaton
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 and
Church
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 Mount throughout the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, libraries, west, eaton, ryeslip, church, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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