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The table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.

The table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.
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The table
inllustates
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illustrates
 information about how potatoes were consumed and produced in five countries in 2006.
Overall
,it can be seen that the highest consumer of potatoes
were
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Europe
,
while
 the opposite was true for Africa.
In addition
,
Europe
 and
Asia
 were
two
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the two
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 countries that grew the most potatoes among
five
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the five
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 regions. Looking at
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further
 detail,
Europe
 and
Asia
 produced 126.3
million
 and 131.2
million
 tonnes respectively.
In contrast
,other continents grew much less with 15.6
million
 than in South and Central
America
,16.4
million
 in Africa and nearly 24.7
million
 in North
America
 during
this
 timeframe. Turning to the remaining statistics,
comsumption
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consumption
 rates in
Europe
 and North
America
 were 96.1 and 57.9 per person respectively.At the next
levels
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,the amount of
these vegetable
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this vegetable
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 was low
ar
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at
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 25.8 for
Asia
.
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South and Central
America
 consumed
fewer
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 than
Asia
 2.2 kg per person in 2006,
while
 the figure for Africa was the lowest
14.1
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 kg
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