The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.

The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
The line graph illustrates the number of 3 different kinds of questionnaires gathered ( in person- by letter/email- by
telephone
) which enquiries by tourist information between January and June in 2011.
Overall
, the collection of questionnaires in person and by
telephone
increased throughout specific periods,
while
by the letter decreased. In the initial stage of the period, the
by
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telephone
was the leading received. Eventually, the in-person became the most widely used received, overtaking both the by-
telephone
and the
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in the final months. With regards to the number of
the
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in-person responses, it began at over 400 and
then
dropped
a
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high of nearly 1800 in June.
Likewise
, about 900 responses
of
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by
telephone
were received in the first month, after which the figure fluctuated slightly before going up dramatically to 1600 in June.
On the other hand
, the responses
of
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by-letter only started in January at approximately 800 ,
this
figure fell slightly until May to around 400 but it stabilized in the final months to around under 400.
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