The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian boys and girls school pupils attending 4 different sports activities after school in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian boys and girls school pupils attending 4 different sports activities after school in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates how the percentage of
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both genders participating in different activities changed in Australia in 2010.
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, the proportion of female
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who took part in all sports was higher than that of their male counterparts, with the exception of football and basketball.
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, there is an opposite between the figures for Australian pupils who were interested in football and netball in
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period. Looking at the
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for football pattern, exactly 20% of males participated in
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kind of sport,
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the proportion of their counterparts was significantly lower, reporting at under 5%, the lowest
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, in 2010.
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, the gender role was changed in the
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for netball, with around 17% of females taking part in
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sport and roughly 3% of males in 2010. Turning to the remaining statistics, the proportion of
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pupils who chose to go swimming was above 15%, which was higher than that of
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, at 13%.
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similar pattern was seen in the
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for
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who did not attend any sports, reporting at about 4,5% for females and 4% for their counterparts. Interestingly, basketball was far more interesting with Australian boys than girls, with just 7% for the former and 6.5% for the latter.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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