The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
the chart illustrates the
percetage
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percentage
of people (women and men)
with
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of
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various ages who did sport in 2010. the highest
pecentage
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percentage
of female , who
care
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about their
healthiness
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,
are
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from 45 to 54
years
old.the
while
female more than 65
years
old made up
lowest
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the lowest
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percentage
of the graph.. and 15 to 24
years
old males made up the highest
percetntage
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percentage
.
wheras
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whereas
males at 45 to 64
years
old
experinced
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experienced
experience
the lowest amount.
moreover
, it
also
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worth mentioning from 15 to 44 the
percentage
of men
decresed
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decreased
markedly
.but
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but
the
percentage
of women had a
considerably
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rise. moving into the next age range from 45
years
old the
percentage
of males rose and women
percentage
fell slightly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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