the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Writing task 1 test 1 18 The given line graph illustrates the population proportion in four Asian areas that live between 1970 and 2020.
Moreover
, forecasting about population in 2030 and
also
in 2040.
Overall
, in all cities it can be seen there was an upward trend except in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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which had a small fluctuation from 1980 to 2010.
Furthermore
, we can observe data in more detail, Malaysia and the Philippines started approximately in one stage at 30
percent
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in 1970. The former had a dramatic increase in residences until 2020 at 75
percent
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, predicting it will grow in the future as well, and
this
share of the population will be responsible for 85%. The latter was a gentle fluctuation between 1980 and 2010 there was a margin growth in 1990 at 45% and
then
came back to first place at above 30%, afterward we can see gentle growth until 2020,
also
it will be increased to 55% at end of 2040. Looking
Furthermore
, in Thailand amount of people was under 20% at the first step,
however
, it remained stable over the years 1990 to 2020, it can show it will increase considerably to 45%. Indonesia at first
last
rank but there was a sustainable boom in 2020 at 55% and had a second rank and an upward trend will continue at 65% in the future.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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