The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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the proportion of British pupils in

universtiy

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university

universities

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the UK

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who

where

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were

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master

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in other

languages

besides

English, between 2000 and 2010.

Overall

Spanish was still the most popular in both years

according to

the proportion.

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a 10% decrease in the portion of students who are not able to speak any other

languages

was obviously observed between two years.

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the percentage of German speakers remained constant at 10%

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the segments of other

language

speakers climbed up. The percentage of Spanish and two other

language

speakers increased by 5% as same as that of another

language

speaker.

Conversely

, the portion of students who speak French and who cannot speak any other

language

decreased by 5% and 10%, respectively. These changes indicate the higher popularity of speaking other

languages

among UK students except for French. Among all additional

languages

spoken by the

student

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students

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Spanish

have

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more proportion in both years.

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